A sad and misguided poem, confused and contradictory.

The theme is an important one and i applaud you for attempting to work with that. I feel that this could be a much better and more penetrating piece if you were to give it more thought, reflection and work, particular in relation to the various stereotypical generalisations, the mixed point of view and the confused morality.

Winston Churchill once said, (and I paraphrase), "What one gets gives you a living, what one gives gets you a life." For a framework, this may be useful.

My intention with these words is not to demean but to encourage and advise. You may or may not agree with my assessment and that is your right. I simply try to offer considered response rather than a one or two line quick praising or whatever.

Take care. Stay safe. ☮️